For all teenagers and book lovers. What do you think of my writing?

It's good, only you have to remember that your character is older so his actions should portray just that. if you hadn't given away that he's 45 yrs. old i would have said that he was in his late 20's early 30's. I really liked the ending part it's good imagery. however i found the beginning a little confusing. you have really great writing skills .